My manager asked me to draft an email for conducting the 2nd session of 6 months training. Below is the email I have drafted and would like to have suggestion on how to make this email impressive enough.
Dear All,
This is to inform you that in continuation to our previous training sessions conducted on (Date), we are pleased to announce schedule for the 2nd session of “Training name" by (Institute Name). As informed earlier, all 30 professionals who attended the previous session shall be continuing the same.
Details of the training will be provided below this content.
Thanks!!
From India, New Delhi
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1Dear All,
This is to inform you that in continuation to our previous training sessions conducted on (Date), we are pleased to announce schedule for the 2nd session of “Training name" by (Institute Name). As informed earlier, all 30 professionals who attended the previous session shall be continuing the same.
Details of the training will be provided below this content.
Thanks!!
From India, New Delhi
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Dear Team,
This mail is in reference to previous training sessions conducted on (Date), we are pleased to announce schedule for the 2nd session of “Training name" by (Institute Name).
As informed earlier, all 30 participants who attended the previous session shall be continuing the same.
Details of the training will be provided below this content.
Thanks!!
From India, Bangalore
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This mail is in reference to previous training sessions conducted on (Date), we are pleased to announce schedule for the 2nd session of “Training name" by (Institute Name).
As informed earlier, all 30 participants who attended the previous session shall be continuing the same.
Details of the training will be provided below this content.
Thanks!!
From India, Bangalore
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Dear Mini,
Rather than commenting on the draft that you have prepared, I would like to bring up an issue that has arisen following your post. Perhaps, you were inadvertently not considering this when you made the post.
It is customary for a manager to ask their junior to draft an email or letter. However, after preparing the draft, the junior is expected to present it to their manager for review. Instead of following this protocol, you have chosen to seek corrections or enhancements for your draft from a general HR forum. By not directly approaching your manager, it indicates a disconnect between you and your manager. Alternatively, it could imply a lack of confidence in your manager's drafting abilities.
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Dinesh Divekar
From India, Bangalore
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Rather than commenting on the draft that you have prepared, I would like to bring up an issue that has arisen following your post. Perhaps, you were inadvertently not considering this when you made the post.
It is customary for a manager to ask their junior to draft an email or letter. However, after preparing the draft, the junior is expected to present it to their manager for review. Instead of following this protocol, you have chosen to seek corrections or enhancements for your draft from a general HR forum. By not directly approaching your manager, it indicates a disconnect between you and your manager. Alternatively, it could imply a lack of confidence in your manager's drafting abilities.
Thanks,
Dinesh Divekar
From India, Bangalore
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Dear Dinesh,
First of all, I would like to thank you for taking the time to share your input. Furthermore, I would like to apprise you that I always aim to be impressive in my emails and calls. I asked for suggestions so that I can gather more ideas for the future on how to move things forward or explore other ways to circulate this email. I have already shared the email draft with my manager for review. However, as there is always room for improvement and learning, I decided to seek advice from professionals on Citehr as one of the options.
Thanks & Regards,
Mini Bisht
From India, New Delhi
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First of all, I would like to thank you for taking the time to share your input. Furthermore, I would like to apprise you that I always aim to be impressive in my emails and calls. I asked for suggestions so that I can gather more ideas for the future on how to move things forward or explore other ways to circulate this email. I have already shared the email draft with my manager for review. However, as there is always room for improvement and learning, I decided to seek advice from professionals on Citehr as one of the options.
Thanks & Regards,
Mini Bisht
From India, New Delhi
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